Stolen Words
As I started to tell you yesterday, your next post will consist of stolen words. You will be (or have been already) seeking out the strongest words, phrases and sentences from other people's blogs. You will pick them out and use them as your own. Then you will explain exactly how these words are so powerful. It will go something like this:
"Every sharp burst of pain you get when you fall down a flight of stairs..."
-The word burst is what gets me. It seems to say that the pain will be intense and unpredictable, but because I will be falling down stairs it will come as a cycle of tumbling.
"She is worth welding my palms together."
-This sentence seems so unlikely that it stands out. Using skin as a metal that melts together is such an eirie thought that I have to try imagining it.
"I was bloody and bruised or scraping myself with shattered glass until I was skinless."
-The image of someone being responsible for their own skinlessness is so graphic and wonderful. I almost wish I had the description of how a skinless person looks with all of his/her intestines hanging out, just so I could visualize it more.
"I will injure you to the point of exhaustion, extinction."
-The statement of "extinction" points out that everything you stand for is dead, and not just you. It is so strong, such a condemning word.
"...the emptiness in your room."
-This image is so personal and intimate. I like it for its purity.
"...run into a million poles untill my head started to bleed."
-I'm not quite sure if this is a row of poles or just one pole hitting her head over and over, but either way it is so nonsensical that it stands out. I wonder how big the poles are, though.
"shave off all my hair and eat it."
-To me, this is the worst offense of all. I can't stand the feeling of hair in my mouth, let alone hair in my stomach. It truly sickens me.
You may also, for extra credit, convert these lines into a fluid poem of your own design. You may only use the words contained in your stolen line (you may not add anything, but you can take stuff away). Here is an example.
Scraping with shattered glass
All of my hair.
Every sharp burst of pain
Welds my wrists together.
The emptiness of your room:
Skinless, Extint.
"Every sharp burst of pain you get when you fall down a flight of stairs..."
-The word burst is what gets me. It seems to say that the pain will be intense and unpredictable, but because I will be falling down stairs it will come as a cycle of tumbling.
"She is worth welding my palms together."
-This sentence seems so unlikely that it stands out. Using skin as a metal that melts together is such an eirie thought that I have to try imagining it.
"I was bloody and bruised or scraping myself with shattered glass until I was skinless."
-The image of someone being responsible for their own skinlessness is so graphic and wonderful. I almost wish I had the description of how a skinless person looks with all of his/her intestines hanging out, just so I could visualize it more.
"I will injure you to the point of exhaustion, extinction."
-The statement of "extinction" points out that everything you stand for is dead, and not just you. It is so strong, such a condemning word.
"...the emptiness in your room."
-This image is so personal and intimate. I like it for its purity.
"...run into a million poles untill my head started to bleed."
-I'm not quite sure if this is a row of poles or just one pole hitting her head over and over, but either way it is so nonsensical that it stands out. I wonder how big the poles are, though.
"shave off all my hair and eat it."
-To me, this is the worst offense of all. I can't stand the feeling of hair in my mouth, let alone hair in my stomach. It truly sickens me.
You may also, for extra credit, convert these lines into a fluid poem of your own design. You may only use the words contained in your stolen line (you may not add anything, but you can take stuff away). Here is an example.
Scraping with shattered glass
All of my hair.
Every sharp burst of pain
Welds my wrists together.
The emptiness of your room:
Skinless, Extint.
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